In article <13133724616912896@freedvd.com>, jyltatsp@freedvd.com wrote:
Well, since this is an _English_ newsgroup...
> Hi
>
> Im 22 and I really need someone to take care of me.
* "I'm" is the contraction for "I am"
* "Really" is a weak accent, and you don't "need" someone to take care
of you, you'd like that. Perhaps "...and I'd very much like for someone
take take care of me in the following ways: [List the various ways,
here]"
> Please take a look at my home page, you
* "Please take a look at my home page." Is a complete sentence,
followed by "You can..."
> can email me and maybe we could get in touch and have some
> fun.
* ...Although it might be stronger writing to say something like "Please
take a look at my home page then email me. Perhaps we could..."
* Once someone emails you, you HAVE gotten in touch. I believe you mean
"...and perhaps we could meet and have some fun."
> My home page is here <link removed>
> Please get in touch soon :)
* Redundant.
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