Several months ago, I put up for comments a first-cut of the story,
"Jenny" here in ASSD. I never really posted the story to the
newsgroups until today. I don't know if this counts as a "first post"
or not. I have added almost all the corrections suggested back then
though.
At the time, I mentioned that the *basis* for what I thought was a
rather good *story* was stolen from a complete jack-off fantasy
called, "A Teenaged Boy's Fantasy". I never got around to posting
*that* either; though I did send it out for kibitzing, and got some
*very* good responses in reply. I just never *quite* got around to
making the fixes people pointed out to me it needed. I dithered quite
a bit, trying to make the fixes without spoiling other parts of the
story. Mainly it was ages of various people not matching dates and
such. Just didn't work the way it was written ... but changing things
spoiled other ages; and it worked it's way through the whole story.
It's *hard* to stick another car right in the middle of a train.
Ah well. The story *was* essentially complete for several months now,
except for that.
So, when I needed to complete a promise to post a *good* story, again
I dithered ... this time as to whether to post another good story ...
or finish this one (these two?) and post them together. I decided to
use the kick-in-the-butt to stimulate me to post ones that really
should have been posted months ago, as those people who commented on
each really have been expecting.
So, here they are, all nice and pretty, posted in the "usual" places:
"A Teenaged Boy's Fantasy" Not really a "story" so much as one big
joke and jack-off story ... Something sophomoric in it's aim to get as
much sex and actual intercourse in as often as possible. For those
who don't care for my usual fare: For heaven's sake, skip this one!
It's almost a cliche itself of being a caricature of all the earmarks
and things that make a "Frank McCoy" story. It's my vision of what I
would have had wet-dreams about life being like as a teenager.
Actually, my daydreams back then were NEVER that good. This is more
like I *wish* my wet-dreams had been. Reality like that would have
been ... overwhelming. Probably would have killed me; but what a way
to go, eh?
"Jenny" on-the-other-hand, is a *STORY* rather than a jack-off fantasy
(though it has some of that in there too). It's the tale of an idiot,
who doesn't realize how much of an idiot he is until too late ... and
like many such idiots, spends the rest of his life regretting it.
Sad.
If you look for it, it's easy to find where "Jenny" was ripped from "A
Teenaged Boy's Fantasy" as I left that part in there too. Yeah,
Plagiarizing my own stories ... But then, I've done that before. ;-}
If anybody would like to nominate either of *these* two stories for
Clitorides; figuring it's a better story, please feel free to do so.
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