This is what a user named emil sinclair said about my story on prettyboy:
> "Well ... at least your writing has relatively few careless spelling errors
> (though the first of these occurs only a few sentences in: 'extremly.'
>
> That said, this story is exceedingly empty. Virtually zero thought or
> creativity seems to have gone into it. The characters are barely
> one-dimensional. The boys are interchangeable. The setting barely qualifies
> as generic. There is no conflict, no drama, no tension, no whim or desire
> that is not immediately fulfilled. Time has no particular meaning. There is
> not a single feature of this fictional world that reminds us of real life.
>
> This is, I would say, an unintentional self-portrait of an empty mind. The
> closet thing to a problem that these characters must face is a broken
> air-conditioning system in what seems an affluent home. And the two friends
> face the terrible dilemma of having forgotten their swimming suits! Oh my.
>
> All erotic stories are fantasies, in some way, but a rule of fantasy is that
> it must feel real, within its own boundaries. Think of Narnia. This world is
> just ridiculous. Joshua is nude all the time -- therefore nudity has no
> meaning. He sits around playing Playstation nude. He goes swimming nude. He
> slips on boxer shorts to answer the door, then gets naked again. Yawn.
>
> One marvels to contemplate the kind of life 'insaneforboys' has led, to have
> taught him absolutely nothing."
This is my response to emil sinclair
"LMAO!!!!!!
My story is MAINLY meant to be a porno story so boylovers who read it
can get a good jerk off. That's all. Just a story to make you horny and
have a good orgasm. The reason I put in the broken air conditioning was
so the boys would be naked in the house. The 2 friends forgot their
swimming suits so they would be forced to swim naked. Joshua had to get
nude again because his friends would be swimming nude as well. I
INTENTIONALLY put in very little plot with a generic setting so the
reader could get to the good sexual stuff without having to read a
bunch of stupid plot bullshit. If that wasn't obvious to you, then you
must have some mental problems. With that said, what is your opinion of
the sexual descriptions? Which are the MAIN parts of my story that I am
MOST concerned about. You don't know me personally so how can you make
such judgements? You base them on a PORNO story that I'm writing! WOW!
LMAO!!!!!!!"
If your server carries prettyboy, please go over and give emil some
shit for this! Thanks!
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